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like i said befor he should be like 10 or 11 so then you would have to change that part that sais ive lived twice as long to ive lived longer and know more stuff like that but like i said just make him a little older and it will make more sence

Posted by: slave on 6/9/2008, 12:20 PM

Nice job! Pretty tight!

Posted by: Trevor Rackley on 2/29/2008, 9:51 PM

ive tried sum more. i may rite sum more 2moz!! not da greatest start, but we can build up kid, got a fresh new car, and a rolex mint. So mayb the price wont worth the pain, neva ment for you to get sent down again. wat i told u brov wen they cum breeze out, cos they`ll lock y`all up, and pounch that out. y`all young ya`ll learn, got the language sup, wana see ya with buisness, if u chose to grow up. bex x

Posted by: becky on 1/16/2008, 12:31 PM

ok. re-write your language, such as change from: I`m eight , you`re four... I`ve lived twice as much and know, The drive-by`s and whats` up... What are you going to be... IF you grow up... Im eight, y`all four, i lived twice as much more. so listen to wat im sayin, cos else y`all b the 1 payin. ur jus a kid, but da streets r cold, dey dnt care who ya r, let alone how old. i`ll do all i can brov, cos ya been put on me, help y`all dodge bullets, dog eat dog, but my responsibilty, y`all family, through the blood y`al all i see, hold to me brov, im gona help u see. i`ll keep helping u work on it. bex x

Posted by: becky on 1/16/2008, 12:27 PM

I like this one, Great writing Alex! Very provocative!

Posted by: Jonathan on 1/10/2008, 7:34 AM

It is funny how you use the symbol and tool of destruction in the hands of Jimmy at four. Very, very clever writing. “Jimmy’s only four and doesn’t understand He’s chasing his brother, toy pistol in hand.” We are trained in the art of self-destruction from birth. (Very sad) Excellent songwriting!

Posted by: Eddison Baptiste on 1/4/2008, 10:47 PM

i love the lyrics. songs are about life experiences and your song touches on whats going on today. Excellent

Posted by: ANGEL STRONG on 12/30/2007, 9:49 PM

i think that a 8 he dosent full understand everything yet and he should be a little older but thats just me other then that i like it

Posted by: slave on 12/20/2007, 3:51 AM

i have to agree with both comments....i love the lines that taylor mentioned, but at the same time it needs more "street cred"....just a thought

Posted by: Chris Turner on 12/9/2007, 6:46 AM

this is very ghetto BUT also very true. stuff like this is happening all the time i like the "what are you going to be? if you grow up?" its saddening and kinda scary well done

Posted by: Taylor on 12/7/2007, 6:29 PM

really good `ghetto` song, but i have one major problem..its very gangsta, with guns and death, but the wording is `proper`, it sounds more like a rappers song. needs slang, bex x

Posted by: becky on 12/7/2007, 9:07 AM